Mr Becker went over my script to help me evaluate where to make changes as he has more experience and a different view, as he was detached from the story. A few of the changes were rudimentary as they were to do with punctuation, structuring and wording of elements. However, there were also developments in the plot and narrative to make it have a more tense atmosphere. There were also developments in the character and the details that i wrote in to the script about them.
A lot of the developments which Mr Becker suggested I wrote in my own words in annotation, these included developments of the ending in which he suggested I made more of Fi and Kate in space and create a more atmospheric ending. He also suggested that I cut out a lot of the speech conveying the elements more by visual than by speech, again to create a more cinematic film. There were also elements which needed to be described more clearly such as the carrying of materials, by doing this it would cut confusion for readers of the script (actors and other workers on set).
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